General problems with EII written work, in order of importance

First and foremost: you must proof-read. To catch sentence level errors, proof-read aloud.

If you get distracted by your own beautifully-forged outline, read the last sentence aloud first, and then the second last and so on.

Major problems:

1. No proof-reading.
2. No outline
3. Passive voice
4. Sentence fragments
5. Run-on sentence
6. Comma splices
7. Spell-check errors
8. Little use and misuse of commas
9.  Repetitive
10. Non sequiteur
11. Lack of segue
12. Tense choice problem

Minor problems:

1. Spell out small numbers
2. Comma after prepositional phrase
3. Its versus it's
4. There versus their